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red darkness
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[info]dandygrrrl

Title: Red darkness 3
Author: Dandygrrrl
Pairing:Frank/Gerard, (My chemical romance) may be others
Rating:Overall NC-17
Summary:Gerards a born vampire, so is Frank but doesn't know it. Set in the future when vampire's have taken over, oh and these vampire's can go out in the sun.
Disclaimer:Don't own anyone but I might try kidnapping bhahahaha
Author Notes:OK you properly know the deal but I'm dislexic and this is unbeaterd so anyone want to beater it. Oh and I know the spelling and grammer's really terrible.
Warnings:Bdsm, bloodplay, Gerard's not exectly nice but hey he's a vampire, acterly he may turn out to be a compleat psycho I want to try and write from the point of view of psychopathic bastard. Very bad language. Possible malepreg as in this au certain male vampire's can get pregnate. A very dom Gerard and a very sub Frank. Many chapter's may be pwp, a lot of vampire smut.

 I would like to a vote on who you would like to see Bob with. In my mind it's between MIkey Way, (Maybe a little to obverious) Patrick Stump (Come on I love fob and at least one of the fall out boys has gone to be in somewhere.) or Ryan Ross (I honestly don't know of any other stories with that pairing.) Or have you got any of your own Idea's

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Chapter Three

 

Frank was having no such luck as he pushed himself through the heard of students. Few looked at him but he tried his hardest not to meet anyone’s eyes. Most of the students towered over his petite frame, when he finely made it to the principle’s office he pretty much wanted to just run away. He knocked at the door and sighed as he heard a loud voice telling him to enter.

“You must be Frank Iero take a seat.” The principle Mr. Western said motioning to a seat. Frank nervously sat down playing nervously with the cuffs of his denim jacket. He looked up at the middle aged man who was now staring at him intently, he watched as the principle started flipping through his file. Mr. Western looked back at him again before flipping back through the file as if he was looking for something.

Frank began to get nervous as the principle didn’t look up from the file. Frank knew well enough that the teachers at his old school didn’t like him. He wasn’t sure why, he felt he was a pretty much a good kid. He had always done his home work on time and was pretty much polite. Yet they seemed to have something against him. He had even herd them talking about him being weird and odd.

“Frank do you know who your really parents are?” Mr. Western looked at him from over the rim of his glasses. Frank couldn’t help but notice that he looked a little nervous.

“No sir.” Frank said frowning no one had ever asked him such a question before.

“It says here that at your last school you seemed to be a lot of trouble.”

“I…It wasn’t me. T…the other k…kids didn’t like me sir.” Frank cursed him self that he was stuttering and he cursed that dam file. He was surprised when Mr. Western smiled in if wasn’t mistaken a rather kind way.

“Well Frank let’s make a fresh start of it shell we.”

Frank looked up shocked as Mr. Western put his file in the nearest bin.

 

 

Mr. Western watched as Frank left the office. He was pretty sure he knew what the boy was. He had been around vampire’s long enough to know a fertile when he saw one. Hell the boy was that pale if wasn’t what he thought he was he would mistake him for being at death door. His skin seemed to off a blue tinge. He wondered how no one had noticed before but then again most humans didn’t look to close at these things.

 He smiled to himself as he thought about how different Frank was going to find school here if he was what he thought he was.


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**Yay** This Just Made My Day <3 Soo Happy!

glad you liked just nearly finesed chapter four. The unbeated version will be up in my jornal very soon

Hi I don't remember how i found this story but I really like it.

I could beta for you. I am good with spelling and pretty good with grammer, so if you don't get any other offers I would love to help :)

Thank's I'm glad you like it I have a beta but thanks for the offer I just put all the unbeta stuff up in my jornal first. Chapter four up by the way.

Um...some edits...?

[info]ji_hi

2008-02-12 01:30 am (UTC)

I dunno, these are just some things I noticed...I hope I'm not being too annoying...but I figure some of this would help your story flow better and stuff...most of it was just a few missing commas and periods in the wrong place. Sorry if it gets confusing, I ended up changing the way I commented on it a lot throughout reading it. But I like what you've written so far! Vampires are awesome, Frank is awesome, and vampire Frank is uber awesome.

Frank was having no such luck as he pushed himself through the herd(this one was the wrong word) of students. Few looked at him but he tried his hardest not to meet anyone’s eyes. Most of the students towered over his petite frame.>(was a run-on) When he finely made it to the principle’s office,(just needed a pause) he pretty much wanted to just run away. He knocked on the door and sighed as he heard a loud voice telling him to enter.

“You must be Frank Iero,
(once again, needed a break between the words) take a seat.” The principle, Mr. Western, said motioning to a seat. Frank nervously sat down playing nervously(I think you should take out one of the 'nervously' to not be so repetitive, but that's up to you) with the cuffs of his denim jacket. He looked up at the middle aged man who was now staring at him intently,(you could just use something like 'and' instead of using a comma here) he watched as the principle started flipping through his file. Mr. Western looked back at him again before flipping back (also, you could take out the word 'back' right here)through the file as if he was looking for something.

Frank began to get nervous as the principle didn’t look up from the file. Frank knew well enough that the teachers at his old school didn’t like him. He wasn’t sure why,
(instead of a comma, you could use 'as') he felt he was a pretty much a good kid. He had always done his home work on time and was pretty much polite.(adding a comma here, instead of a period would make it flow better) Yet they seemed to have something against him. He had even herd(this one would be 'heard' not 'herd) them talking about him being weird and odd.

“Frank, do you know who your really
(the 'ly' isn't needed here) parents are?” Mr. Western looked at him from over the rim of his glasses. Frank couldn’t help but notice that he looked a little nervous.

“No sir.” Frank said frowning
(adding a period would make it flow better) no one had ever asked him such a question before.

“It says here that at your last school you seemed to be a lot of trouble.”

“I…It wasn’t me. T…the other k…kids didn’t like me sir.” Frank cursed him self that he was stuttering and he cursed that dam
(n) file. He was surprised when Mr. Western smiled in(,) if wasn’t mistaken(,) a rather kind way.

“Well Frank
(,) let’s make a fresh start of it(,) shell('shall') we.(?)

Frank looked up shocked as Mr. Western put his file in the nearest bin.





Mr. Western watched as Frank left the office. He was pretty sure he knew what the boy was. He had been around vampire’s
(no apostrophe needed) long enough to know a fertile when he saw one. Hell(,) the boy was that pale if wasn’t what he thought he was he would mistake him for being at death door.(could be written as-hell, the boy was so pale that if he didn't think he was a vampire, he would have mistook him for being at death's door-though I'm not sure if that's what you're trying to say) His skin seemed to(give) off a blue tinge. He wondered how no one had noticed before(,) but then again(,) most humans didn’t look to close at these things.

He smiled to himself as he thought about how different Frank was going to find school here if he was what he thought he was.








Re: Um...some edits...?

[info]dandygrrrl

2008-02-12 01:40 am (UTC)

Not at all chapter four up by the way if you want to email any mistakes I made (And mistakes are what I do best.) My email is fionamarsh36@yahoo.com. You majorly good with grammer by the way.

Re: Um...some edits...?

[info]ji_hi

2008-02-12 02:00 am (UTC)

I just finished commenting on your other chapter, but I'll do that next time. Just so you know, my email is Jixhimstrsgatad@sbcglobal.net.

And thanks, I've just had it trained into me from the time that I was like...6 or 7 because my teachers thought I should be put into like advanced reading and English classes(and I don't say this to show off or anything, I'm sorry if it came out that way). But I still have a lot of studying to do on it, grammar's a bitch like that *shrug*.

Re: Um...some edits...?

[info]dandygrrrl

2008-02-12 02:39 am (UTC)

Wow I was basically unable to read or write untill I was something like thirteen and then only basic stuff. I was put into speacel lessons for kids with dylexica and a.d.d. It was pretty awsome really though, it was excterly one of the most creative classes in the school. Some of the kids with a.d.d wore so good at thinking outside the box.

Re: Um...some edits...?

[info]ji_hi

2008-02-12 02:47 am (UTC)

Seems like we come from different backgrounds, doesn't it? I remember reading like my first college level book when I was like...9. I never got to read a Dr.Seuss book, though...How old are you?-that is, if you don't mind my asking

And that sounds awesome. Anybody that sees beyond the set limits is truly admirable in my book. I think the world needs more people like that.

Re: Um...some edits...?

[info]dandygrrrl

2008-02-12 02:59 am (UTC)

I'm 31 one now and properly to old to be writting fan fic. But I allways had these idea's but I never had the confidence to post untill recently, and I often come up with all story lines in my head based on a pop video or I be watching a film and thinking I wished that happened. I didn't read my first adult book untill I was sixteen or maybe seventeen. Anyway it was after watching Interview with a vampire and my friend had the book the vampire Lestat, I really wanted to know what happened after the film so I pretty much taught my self to read. It took me allmost a year to read but it was worth it and I can read really good but my spelling and grammer are really poor. When I first started I wrought a fic in a lord of the ring community and I got a lot of people telling me about the spelling and stuff they all thought I was like eleven or something lol.

Re: Um...some edits...?

[info]ji_hi

2008-02-12 03:10 am (UTC)

That's about 2 years older that my oldest sister...I'm almost 17, lol. Eh, you're never too old to do something you like, that's what I think. Unless its like...illegal or something...I've always wanted to read that book, but never had a chance. And yeah, I know how daunting it can be to post a story...I always start shaking before posting mine, but y'know I'm totally glad you posted this one. I was looking forward to it all day, and I think you've got an awesome brain for story ideas, and like I said before, they just need some cleaning up and then will be able to totally kick ass.

Re: Um...some edits...?

[info]dandygrrrl

2008-02-12 03:14 am (UTC)

Thanks :) I'm glad you think the ideas are good.

Re: Um...some edits...?

[info]ji_hi

2008-02-12 03:25 am (UTC)

Yeah, no prob. S'pretty much why I wanted to help you out with it.

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